For writing this week we had to write a description about a person that means a lot to us but we don't live with. We had to describe their face, hair, skin, voice, character and what makes them special to you or what they are known for. We also had to add similes. I did it on my Grandpa.
His frail skin wears a little more every day. The skin on his hands are rough due to him working long hours involving hands on work such as using the chain saw and lifting wood. His wrinkled skin reflects his age and he has one blind eye.
Grandpa has sharp whiskers which are always trimmed down neatly like the grass in summer. His thin grey hair is wearing away . He has a blistered nose which looks very sore.
Grandpa owns big machinery liked a loader and a 1.7 ton digger. He operates big machinery for his job. He has three cars a Ute a 5 seater car and and old fashioned car with an adjustable roof which is pretty impressive. After a long day at work he often goes to the pub for a drink of beer. Grandpa knows how to play the bagpipes, he doesn't play them that much anymore because he runs out of breath. Grandpa has a variety of colorful chickens and also has two cats named Smudge and Tiger who dart away whenever we go to his house. Grandpa has a deep voice. When he talks he is calm and assertive.
Grandpa is very kind because he brings us fizz and lollies every Sunday. He often goes and chops down trees for people in the weekend.
Grandpa has a twin who chopped off grandpa s finger by accident when they were young when they were out splitting wood.
Dear Sophie
ReplyDeletethis is really
good and descriptive
good job next time use better words
From Danni
Hi Sophie,
ReplyDeleteYou described your grandpa very well, I can imagine what he looks like in my head. You used lots of great describing words. Was it hard trying to describe your grandpa?
Keep up the good work.
Prudence,
Yaldhurst Model School
Hi sophie
ReplyDeleteYour grandpa sounds like a nice guy.I love your writing it had lots of adjectives and similes next time maybe you could add more commas than full stops.
Keep up your amazing writing
Nikoli,
Yaldhurst Model School